| 2014-07-17 00:40:34 |
A well planned nightmare part 1 (please comment or msg me :))
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Yes, please work on your grammar and writing ability. I didn't even want to continue reading it. Use paragraphs, quotations, commas, and everything else. Don't do a part 2, just work on the content and re-writing of this story. It will help you. Get a proof reader if you can. Spend more than a half hour on your story. |
| 2014-07-17 00:40:09 |
A well planned nightmare part 1 (please comment or msg me :))
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Yes, please work on your grammar and writing ability. I didn't even want to continue reading it. Use paragraphs, quotations, commas, and everything else. Don't do a part 2, just work on the content and re-writing of this story. It will help you. Get a proof reader if you can. Spend more than a half hour on your story. |
| 2014-07-16 16:49:50 |
My Sister and the Chair
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Hey, this is the writer here! If you could please comment why you gave it a negative rating, I would really appreciate that so I can know what I can do to improve! Positive comments are appreciated too! Thanks, and hope you enjoy! |
| 2014-12-03 18:20:58 |
Lessons with Mom Pt. 1
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It was a good incest story, but yes, you do need to press enter at least twice in between each paragraph. If you are going to put dialogue, then you should make that it's own line. It was hard to read and follow but it was good in content. Keep it up. If you want any tips or a proof reader, IM the author Punkbonerboy on here. |
| 2014-08-01 06:25:02 |
I Like to Watch Boys Masturbate
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That was good, I really enjoyed that one, I can't wait to hear more! I actually got a huge boner and had to cum while reading it! Thanks! |