| 2012-08-01 11:52:43 |
I'll Show You Mine If You Show Me Yours
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What a wicked little daughter, I love it! Waiting to see where this goes. |
| 2012-08-17 16:30:02 |
Daddy masterbates for me
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Definitely too fast, but because it's your first story you deserve some slack. Take the suggestion, give some background to those in the story and then build in some circumstances as to why they're doing what they're doing. You're not afraid to use descriptive language so that's no big deal. Let your imagination turn you on to what you would want and how it happens; how you would want it if it was happening to you. I'm looking forward to your next story. Good luck. |
| 2012-08-29 09:20:04 |
Stalked & Raped: Part 3
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I think he'll be back...mask and all...wait for him. |
| 2012-09-18 11:15:48 |
My Neighbours Daughter_(1)
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Good story of desire and battle of the conscience eventhough it deals with one of the no nos. |
| 2012-09-18 11:32:00 |
A short introduction to Lilith and her Family.
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Sounds like the makings of some pretty wild stories. Spell check might be of some help but as you know, the English language is notorious for having words that sound the same spelled differently and mean something totally different. Good luck. |