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Comments from NCfan
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2021-04-12 21:52:40 | Small Town Life | Thanks everyone. This is now my most successful story. It helps that it's also one of my favorites. |
| 2021-06-22 20:57:50 | Carlo's Way (The Redheaded Stepchild, part 2) | There’s one more if you liked this one. “Ginny, Ginny, Ginny”. Looks at what happened back at the Matthews house. |
| 2021-06-22 17:01:35 | The Redheaded Stepchild | There are two more chapters - "Carlo's Way" and "Ginny, Ginny, Ginny" that follow up on different aspects of the story. From different characters' view points. |
| 2021-08-18 12:26:59 | Showing Myself Pt. 01 | Good story |
| 2021-09-04 15:01:15 | At Your Service | Thanks for the detailed replies. I agree that so early in the story that may have been confusing. Also I should have had a comma after "shyly". What I prefer to do is start paragraphs with dialogue and then have any text until the next person speaks. I think it reads better and makes it more obvious that we're changing speaker. I really try to avoid, "he said, she said, her mother said, etc" In the example you posted it's so early that the pattern hadn't developed yet. Also the comma would let you know that that line is leading to the next spoken part. Hope that makes sense. |