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Comments from Fayded
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2015-07-11 02:32:52 | My Sister Vickie | Loved it Tony! Sure, it would have been hot if you had actually had sex but I appreciated that you kept it realistic and never embellished. It's good to actually read a story with proper build up rather that siblings, parent/child etc suddenly having uncontrolled spontaneous sex having never shown interest in each other before. Well done! Love to read more of your work |
| 2015-07-13 02:32:57 | Longly Prep | It was a pretty good story but just one little bit of criticism for future works; to much of the story is conversation. Conversation is critical for character development but you need to flesh things out more, like what's happening around them, what are they doing while they talk, etc.. Setting the scene should take up far more text than the actual conversation and if you work on that you will produce much better stories. Look forward to seeing what else you can do! |
| 2015-07-17 02:40:09 | Sis likes to cuddle | Brilliant! Characters and story were believable and really well written. Kudos to you! |