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Date Story title Comment
2011-04-12 07:02:11 Twins, Ch 3 There could be more to this story if I get some feedback asking for it. Otherwise, I could leave it go right where it is.
2011-04-12 16:58:17 Sister Tease Sorry about the mistakes. I don't have an editor. Plus, it was my first ever story I ever wrote. I'm seeing improvements as I go, so it's not like they are getting worse. And at least I know how to yoose a spel cheker
2011-04-13 02:36:10 Twins, Ch 1 Could you not tell by her actions and attitude the Adriana is the "older" of the two? Perhaps not. If so, then I failed when writing this. I thought it would be obvious. Sorry.
2011-04-13 02:53:57 Harry Potter Adventures: Chapter 1 – 6th Year Begins I have just started writing and publishing here myself. Please do us a favor and don't underline everything, and the second post was quite correct. The characters acted out of character.

Other than those two points, this was a pretty good story, and I would encourage you to keep them coming. Maybe not fanfiction next time, but a fantasy straight out of your own head? You will get fewer harsh critiques that way, I bet.
2011-04-14 00:48:25 The Touch_(1) I didn't see any formatting problems. Could you enlighten me? I'll try to do better in future.
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